Lovely work.

Gah...I want a tablet so bad now....:<

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It turned out very nicely. I do have a few comments to make, though: artistically I still feel that the shock effect in the final pane is a little stark - if it were me, I'd have blurred them.

There are a couple of very minor, nitpicky differences to the scene as scripted, but I won't bother to enumerate them as it works well enough as-is.

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Y'know, I actually do see where you're coming from with the last panel. My intention was to create a transitional effect which reflected the colors shown in the backgrounds of the previous three panels, but it doesn't provoke enough of a shock. I'm probably going to modify this today, since I still have the PSD available and I'm itching to try something on Photoshop. It's an easy fix.

As for the scene scripted, aw. Well, in my defense the scene was pretty hard to convert to a comic format. :B It was originally just two sentences/paragraphs/I can't remember long, I believe.

~Keaton

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Hrm.

Shading and highlighting is improving a bit, though I feel like the shadows in the hair are too strong. I especially like the coloring, drawing, and shading of the glass and its liquid; there's some really good shading and highlighting work done on that final splash, too. Keats is drawn as well as ever, too.

I still have a few nitpicks and some suggestions, though.

For one, while you fixed the joints in Keaton's fingers, I think that the shading of the hand is off; it kinda seems like a step back. Also, you didn't adjust the spacing of the three middle panels, which really throws off the flow of the images; even-handed panel separation is a very crucial element of comics and graphic novels. It serves to conduct and control pace and determine how a reader's eye glides across a page--and, thus, it also determines the way a reader processes a story.

And the final picture-specific critique: I really love the background in the final panel, but I think that its vibrancy totally makes the brown floor look horribly bland. Some texture there would've really helped things out. Also, the shadow beneath it is really too nebulous and dark. D:

Okay, and here's another big thing that I just realized. As your skills with coloring and shading and highlighting have progressed, something about it just hasn't been clicking with me, and I think I finally realized why:

I really, honestly think that black lineart does your work a disservice, and that colored lines would totally improve things.

I think it would fit your style way more, and it would make your shading and highlighting work a lot more effective. And it would just feel more natural with your characters, who are often so vivid and intricate; the colored lines would let your designs speak more for themselves. It'd be tricky, but I believe it would be really worth it and really step your work up a couple levels. ^^

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In the story, the floor was tiled :3

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That would've been really good for the picture! =O

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This turned out really nice! I just love how you do your linework and coloring! And I think all the colors on this are very nice!

The expressions and layout of this are also really interesting and great! Awesome work as always!!!

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